Annotated model answer

Argumentative essay: an annotated model response

A strong answer with margin notes that show what earns the marks. Every passage and answer here is our own.

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The exam-style question

This is an argumentative essay question, in the style of the First Language English papers. Read it as you would in the exam, then compare your plan with the model.

'Every school should teach basic cooking.' Write an argumentative essay defending this view, using reasons and examples and answering the strongest objection. This is our own original practice statement.

Our original passageapprox. 155 words

Notes: Cooking in Schools

Argumentative task: you must take and defend one side. Supporting points you may use or improve: many young people leave school unable to cook a simple, cheap meal; diet-related ill health is a growing worry; cooking teaches maths (weighing, timing), science (heat, reactions) and budgeting in a memorable way; a shared meal can build community in a class. Likely objections to answer: the timetable is already crowded; kitchens and ingredients cost money; some say cooking should be taught at home, not school.

A counter to that last point: not every child has someone at home able or willing to teach them, so school may be the only place some will learn. An argumentative essay argues one side firmly but must still deal honestly with the best objection against it, or it looks naive.

Our annotated model response

Model response: Argumentative essay

An argumentative essay commits to a side and defends it with reasons and evidence. It strengthens its case by confronting the best objection head-on.

It is a strange gap in our schools that we teach children the chemistry of combustion but not how to feed themselves, and it is a gap worth closing.1 The first and plainest reason is health: a generation that cannot cook a cheap, balanced meal is pushed towards expensive, processed food and the illnesses that follow.2 Cooking also teaches more than cooking: weighing flour is fractions and watching a sauce thicken is chemistry, so the lesson earns its timetable slot twice over.3 The strongest objection is that cooking belongs at home, not school; but this assumes every child has someone at home able to teach them, and many simply do not.4 Far from crowding the curriculum, then, cooking may be one of the few lessons a student is certain to use every single day of their life.5

A trial lesson can compare your child's own answer with this model on Argumentative essay.

Common errors we see

  • Asserting opinions without reasons or evidence
  • Ignoring or brushing off the strongest objection
  • A thesis that is vague or shifts as the essay goes on
  • Emotive claims ('everyone likes it') standing in for argument
  • No clear structure linking each reason back to the case

How this maps to the mark scheme

Examiners mark against assessment objectives. These are the skills the paper rewards.

For argumentative essay, the objectives in play are listed below. The wording is summarised for Cambridge IGCSE First Language English (0500) on our qualification page.

  • Articulate experience and express what is thought, felt and imagined.
  • Organise and structure ideas and opinions for deliberate effect.
  • Use register and style appropriate to purpose and audience.
  • Make accurate use of spelling, punctuation and grammar.

Marks reward a clear position, ordered reasons and a persuasive but controlled register. Accuracy is credited separately.

Other boards word their objectives differently, but the same skills earn the marks. Your board's official syllabus gives the exact weighting.

Where to go next

Learn the method in our guide to argumentative essay, then try the argumentative essay practice tasks. You can browse every annotated model response or see how we teach this in our First Language English tuition.

When you have written your own answer, take it to a paid one-hour trial lesson and the teacher who would continue will mark it with you.

Next, visit our original practice tasks to try the same method on a fresh task. Our IGCSE English tuition page explains how lessons run. When you are ready, the paid one-hour trial is the first step.

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